Writing using Google Docs

Today we have been publishing a piece of writing using Google Docs. 

We had to share our writing with 3 other people who were given commenting rights.

We commented on how a person could improve the quality of their piece of writing.

Mrs Lupe-Houben shared the comments she had made on Alaina's piece of writing.

eg:  "Can you add a better adjective into this sentence?"

"How did you feel when you climbed out of the mud?"

"Can you restructure this sentence so that it sounds better?  Have you given your audience enough description that they know how you felt?  What you smelt?"